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    dots Submission Name: Do Not Haste dots
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    Author: Erreur
    ASL Info:    20 / M / Canada
    Elite Ratio:    7.32 - 19/25/14
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 608
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    Description:
       Small little thing. Its sort of the tip of an iceberg of what could have been a great poem. But I feel like its vagueness detracts from the message. Ah well, maybe next time.


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No, do not haste, 
    
For I confess my wish is to admire from afar and wait,  
    
It is in my waiting that I find happiness.
    
The Happiness from the cusp of a fulfilled dream!
    

    
No, do not haste, 
    
Let me enjoy my simple ambitions, before I crave something more, 
    
I've learned to find happiness in the search,  
    
Because I'm rooted by my desires, 
    

    
No, do not haste, 
    
True love resembles the stars which glitter afar.
    
They sit in the sky, drawing our admiration,
    
May they always remain-- a distant star




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      Very good, equal to the finest love.
    | Posted on 2014-11-30 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      i appreciate the do not haste because it seems everyone is in such a rush these days.

    a rush to grow up.
    a rush to to get a real job.
    to own a house; have a family; be whatever the next step is.

    and the problem with that rush is no one is living in the moment. most people miss the scenery on this ride that is life.

    i was just talking with a friend tonight who is a lot younger than i and she told me her life was planned out... get a degree, buy a house, have kids.

    i promised her even if things didnt go to plan they would go just fine because her attitude toward life is right.
    i remember when that was me... when i had my life planned out and thought i knew it all and now ten years later i look back at my life and see the way its turned out and i wouldnt change it for anything even though i dont have a degree or own a home like most of my friends my age do...

    but i have met the love of my life and we have been married and overcome more obstacles than some meet in their whole lives. and thats okay. i wouldnt change a thing.

    but if you told me when i left school that this is how life would pan out i wouldnt have believed you for a second.

    do not haste.
    life is what happens when youre busy making other plans...
    | Posted on 2014-06-14 00:00:00 | by allapo1ogies | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem seems like longing. sometimes love from afar can seem better. more mystery. Do not haste? as in notice perhaps? that becomes the thing. we want to bring it together. make it more real. that's when the ache can start. that's my interpretation. it isn't perfect but if i got it right it does convey a message.
    | Posted on 2014-06-09 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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