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    dots Submission Name: Treasuring The Memorydots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTreasuring The Memorydots
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    She approaches steadily.
    As her silhouette negates the light.
    I shiver readily.
    At this amazingly perfect delight.

    A smile on her face.
    She steps to me and softly sighs.
    Relinquishing a feeling.
    Of sarcastic slow goodbyes.

    I raise my hand and grab her face.
    Her cheeks glow red like a sprouted rose.
    She knows that i love her.
    And thats all i need to know.

    Gently i plant my lips onto hers.
    A kiss she wasn't expecting.
    She reciprocates with another.
    An action worth perfecting.

    Shes everything i want.
    Not new but still an incredible feeling.
    Time freezes for a second.
    And in that time i find love's meaning.




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      Awe! So pretty lol I liked it.
    | Posted on 2014-07-15 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      Definitely love this read. I feel the passion from your words. Oh how I long for something even close to this. Though that is nothing more than a hopeful dream. I personally enjoy the flow of this, however I actually have a similar style given the write. Whoever this gal may be, she sure better hold tight. Not many men will love her the same.
    | Posted on 2014-07-03 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa this poem was very detailed. I thought it was beautiful. You should try counting yiur syllables to help it flow more smoothly.
    </3 Lisa
    | Posted on 2014-06-16 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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