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a sorrow

Author: AsiaticFox
ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254 /389 /301
Words: 52
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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is it time for the skin bottle
to be filled?
yes, for the joy has been killed

a sorrow

oligarchy, my members reigning
dictators of pain
say 'more tears for the day'
skyward glances, I used a million chances
are there more?

blue skies and sun
the hours run
night clambers into me
and harvests more heart

the LP is scratched
a sorrow unending

Submitted on 2014-06-11 12:44:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Ah yes, the ogling ogres of oligarchy, will we ever outgrow them? Like the department of redundancy department "a sorrow unending". Maybe if we all practiced anarchy iconoclasm…………………..but then we'd have ochlocracy and we all know how badly the mob rules itself. Hum…….what's to demagoguery do on the iconography of corporeally preternatural?

| Posted on 2014-06-11 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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