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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1151
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 409



    Description:
       is it time for the skin bottle
    to be filled?
    yes, for the joy has been killed


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    dotsa sorrowdots
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    oligarchy, my members reigning
    dictators of pain
    say 'more tears for the day'
    skyward glances, I used a million chances
    are there more?

    blue skies and sun
    the hours run
    night clambers into me
    and harvests more heart

    the LP is scratched
    skips
    skips
    skips
    skips
    a sorrow unending




    Submitted on 2014-06-11 12:44:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah yes, the ogling ogres of oligarchy, will we ever outgrow them? Like the department of redundancy department "a sorrow unending". Maybe if we all practiced anarchy iconoclasm…………………..but then we'd have ochlocracy and we all know how badly the mob rules itself. Hum…….what's to demagoguery do on the iconography of corporeally preternatural?

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-06-11 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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