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Author: AsiaticFox
ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254 /389 /301
Words: 73
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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Earnest petition to the Unending Light,
"hello, O Great One, please end this night."

"The time is not yet, be patient and true."
"But my heart is stricken, and I long for the New."

"Noted, my dear one, but I cannot rush.
Many to be enlightened, so many to touch."

"Then dry all my tears, Lord, and fill me with joy."
"My spirit will strengthen, my Love be a buoy."




Submitted on 2014-06-11 13:10:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I absolutely love this. It is so sweet and innocent and full of childlike faith, the type of faith that comes only to children who believe and know with their whole beings and love unconditionally.
I especially liked "my Love be a buoy" because of the meaning within it. Such a simple and yet profound way to explain how His love holds us up through calm and rough seas alike.

I also have missed reading your awesome work and can't wait to see more of you :)
| Posted on 2014-06-20 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]
  i think this is a positive and healthy writing. we all take faith differently. doesn't work like that for alot of us. all love is buoy though. i think that's important to remember.
| Posted on 2014-06-12 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
  And we all floated away to happily ever-after.
| Posted on 2014-06-11 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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