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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    ¿Cuantas cosas pierdo si escojo entre tu y yo?
    Ponerte como prioridad, antes de nada;
    pierdo control.

    Sonar como estuviese enamorado...
    realmente ya no sé si
    todavía soy unica persona
    o parte de ti.

    Me parto entre la mitad
    Me paro frente un espejo
    Soy otro cobarde quien no sabe como guiar los sentimientos
    dentro del carro que sea mi propio cuerpo
    quien no sabe como no ponerse lejos,
    ¿por qué razón me preguntas?
    por el miedo.

    No quiero saber como te enamoré
    Solo sé que lo hice sin querer-
    eso te hago créer.

    Ya no me confío;
    látigo en manos de malos intentos.

    Corre, corre,
    que ya no es seguro-
    aún yo se cuantas cosas haré para mantenerte a mi lado

    Ahora me pregunto
    si en alguna vez
    no fué tan peligroso.

    Lo dudo.




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