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the wall


Author: gwenn sundala
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sequel to "the date", i wrote this in response to the poem my then boyfriend gave me for my birthday.


the wall



the wall
i looked at you, you looked at me;
i never could have imagined
that soon we would stand side by side,
both hoping that this will last to the end.

when we first began our journey,
you were no more than a friend;
but soon that would change
as our paths crossed a troubled way.

i began to build a wall,
excluding you from what happened to me;
hoping that you would not see
the flirt i had become.

roaming around from here to there,
a hole in my heart formed.
something was missing, something had changed,
but i was too stupid to admit the truth.

now i can see where i went wrong;
i looked for something i hadn’t truly lost.
i realize that while i was in oz,
what i wanted was back at home all along.

i have broken your heart perhaps once or twice,
leaving you when my heart said stay.
now i realize that i should listen to my heart;
and piece by piece, the ice wall melts…





Submitted on 2014-06-13 10:24:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  roaming around from here to there,
a hole in my heart formed.
something was missing, something had changed,
but i was too stupid to admit the truth.

now i can see where i went wrong;
i looked for something i hadn’t truly lost.
i realize that while i was in oz,
what i wanted was back at home all along.


...the walls of Oz glistening like ice
a solid emerald - cold and slick and bright
dense and impenetrable until a flash of heat
melts one side and steels the other like a sheet...

Just some thoughts about how we can perpetuate what we hope to avoid.
| Posted on 2014-07-07 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  well lets just hope he is still there waiting for the wall to melt... sometimes we make these mistakes... looking for things we think we want or dont have or need when in reality we already have them they just dont look the way we think they should

sometimes we want too much.
sometimes we dont know what we want.
sometimes we're impossible.

it can be as a result of past hurts or lack of self confidence or a great many host of other reasons.

i guess you just gotta understand that if it doesnt work out... if the hurt caused causes him to leave... that you need to use this experience to learn a new way of being so as not to cause this hurt again... both for yourself and your significant other.

and always listen to your heart... it usually knows best. its when you start trying to over think what your heart is saying that you run into complications...
| Posted on 2014-06-14 00:00:00 | by allapo1ogies | [ Reply to This ]


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