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    dots Submission Name: All of the Gods and Angelsdots
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    Author: Esophagus1
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 231/279/149
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This poem is about entropy and how it relates to balance and chaos.


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    dotsAll of the Gods and Angelsdots
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    As it expires so it lives again.
    All the angels came down from heaven.
    The clockwork frame set hoarder
    screams out "One must misalign
    as the other falls into order!"

    If it died it drowned in the well
    luring Satan and his demons up from hell.
    Every time it doesn't turn out as it seems
    all the dogs and men are in their beds
    turning; burning in their dreams.




    Submitted on 2014-06-15 16:08:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      so the bottom is a part of the balance then ey? not technically entropy. i suppose as a poem it can work that way though. poetry has alot of elastic qualities. anyhow yeah balance. can't be without the bottom.

    Every time it doesn't turn out as it seems
    all the dogs and men are in their beds
    turning; burning in their dreams.

    what if it seemed bad to start out with? why not write angels with no devil? meh. good write.
    | Posted on 2014-06-18 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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