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    dots Submission Name: In the Enddots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Showing strength after deception.


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    dotsIn the Enddots
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    The further you fall into love,
    the harder the fall when you're out.
    In the shadows of deceit,
    all hope is left in doubt.

    You tell me you love me,
    then go and do this?
    I knew it was a lie;
    I could taste it on your kiss.

    You deceived my heart
    like you wouldn't get caught.
    But all truth comes out,
    and my forgiveness can't be bought.

    You may have fooled me
    and ended up a fake,
    but it's not my heart
    you're about to break.

    You threw away our love
    like it meant nothing at all...
    but in the end,
    only YOUR tears will fall.




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      but in the end,
    only YOUR tears will fall. I loved these lines. These lines show your valor. It is actually a very good write and reflects your courage after deception. The person who deceives innocuous people has to cry in the end. This is law of nature and my firm belief. Wait for the Lord's justice.
    | Posted on 2014-07-14 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice

    The further you fall into love,
    it's harder the leap when you’re out
    in the shadows of deceit, all hope is lost.
    For you my faith is now left in doubt.

    When you told me you love me,
    why then you go and do this?
    Yes, we knew it was a lie;
    we could tell it on a kiss.

    You deceived my heart
    you wouldn't get caught.
    But all truth do come out,
    forgiveness can't be bought.

    You may have fooled me
    and ended up this fake,
    for it is not my heart
    you are about to break.

    You threw away our love
    as if it meant nothing at all...
    but in the end, this bitter end
    for only these, my tears do fall.
    | Posted on 2014-06-27 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      very very good, I somehow was left wanting more...
    | Posted on 2014-06-16 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was written really well over all. The only parts i thought didnt fit was the third verse. Dont get me wrong it adds depth to your story but i feel the story could go on without it? Dont listen to me though i really enjoyed reading this. Cheers.
    | Posted on 2014-06-16 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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