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    dots Submission Name: Hate Train Lovedots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/65/84
    Words: 295
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHate Train Lovedots
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    Chugga chugga woo woo
    Is what you texted me
    While I sat on a train
    Where I didn't want to be
    It did make me smile
    But that I wouldn't admit
    Sitting on a boring train
    Where I did not want to sit
    Arriving at the station
    To my grandma's house I went
    Time to visit family
    Time I didn't want to spend
    When it was time to go
    In me there was a relief
    I couldn't wait for more texts
    And the calls I would receive
    We spent several hours
    Talking when you called
    We didn't want to hang up
    So hanging up we stalled
    From four to seven hours
    We would have conversations
    Though sometimes we were quiet
    But they were not hesitations
    The silence seemed right
    For a reason I do not know
    We still stayed on the phone
    So quietness did grow
    One night I texted you
    Something I wanted to say
    The words were I love you
    I thought you'd go away
    You said it was too early
    Though inside you felt the same
    Our love grew rather quickly
    At our hearts we both did aim
    We made plans to hang out
    Time in person we did spend
    We had great times together
    My heart had started to mend
    I've never been so happy
    I know you feel the same
    What we felt inside
    Was not some kind of game
    Our feelings are always true
    Neither of us were led on
    But now we both feel pain
    Because from me you're gone
    One day we'll be together
    Again we will be one
    A husband and a wife
    Your leaving will be done
    No more separation
    Nothing will ever keep us apart
    We'll be together always
    We have each other's hearts




    Submitted on 2014-06-22 16:52:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, two forever stamps issued by the U.S. Post Office.
    | Posted on 2014-06-27 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel like the story shifted away from the train reference and became a complete love poem. Regardless, it was good. Nice rhyming and easy flow. All in all, it was nicely done and a good love poem all together
    | Posted on 2014-06-22 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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