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    dots Submission Name: Pork Prisondots
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    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPork Prisondots
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    the light was there
    brighter then imagined
    the tunnel, shrinking
    weight lifted and time enjoyed

    pulled right from under us
    the tunnel grew longer
    light quickly dimmed
    pitch black we sit and wait

    home was so close
    a hop across the pond
    dancing with the idea of freedom
    the music stopped

    standing still our days go on
    each longer then the next
    when will Duetschland let us go
    this prison of pork
    cage of feilds

    LET US FREE!




    Submitted on 2014-06-23 01:49:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      animal cruelty? yes i agree it is horrendus. I eat meat, i probably will never stop. I'm an omnivore so i doubt i really, and fully ever could. but the way we do it is cruel and unfair. i take comfort in the fact that i'm not directly a part of it, and at the same time at unrest for the fact that it even matters. effective writing. very much so. Great job.
    | Posted on 2014-06-24 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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