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Pork Prison


Author: joezwells
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Pork Prison



the light was there
brighter then imagined
the tunnel, shrinking
weight lifted and time enjoyed

pulled right from under us
the tunnel grew longer
light quickly dimmed
pitch black we sit and wait

home was so close
a hop across the pond
dancing with the idea of freedom
the music stopped

standing still our days go on
each longer then the next
when will Duetschland let us go
this prison of pork
cage of feilds

LET US FREE!




Submitted on 2014-06-23 01:49:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  animal cruelty? yes i agree it is horrendus. I eat meat, i probably will never stop. I'm an omnivore so i doubt i really, and fully ever could. but the way we do it is cruel and unfair. i take comfort in the fact that i'm not directly a part of it, and at the same time at unrest for the fact that it even matters. effective writing. very much so. Great job.
| Posted on 2014-06-24 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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