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    dots Submission Name: Missionary (revision)dots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/121
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    We save each other, you and I--
    soul and sabbath intersect
    at a shrouded crossing.

    Flat on my back, a sacred weight
    passes through me, holy spirits
    ghosting between your skin and mine.

    I bear burdens on my hips, wrap my arms
    around the weary backs of the forgotten;
    I hold the lost between my thighs,

    cushion the seeker against my breast,
    each touch an anointing, an offering,
    a summoning prayer.

    In this communion of flesh
    I am raised, again and again,
    every whisper a hymn, a hallelujah.




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      Hi Annie--I read this one first and then went back to see the original. This version rocks and I love to see how the progression has refined and improved it.

    I was wondering what you thought about taking out the 'a' before hallelujah? I would like to read it that way, but that's only me. I love it either way.

    ~Chris
    | Posted on 2014-09-24 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written Annie. You sure do have a knack of writing......

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2014-09-20 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the imagery of this piece, it's so beautifully chilling and sexy. My favorite has got to be of:

    "holy spirits ghosting between your skin and mine"
    | Posted on 2014-06-27 00:00:00 | by Linzi | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this is both sensual and beuatiful. It could be taken as a jab but i see it as not. the body, if a temple, should be celebrated as such. Beautifully provocative.
    | Posted on 2014-06-24 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sexy of you!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2014-06-23 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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