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Oven-shaped Suicide

Author: Kael Fenshir
ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17 /57 /52
Words: 84
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Oven-shaped Suicide

Like a word spoken by Sylvia Plath
I let slip the mind of young
Beautiful and naive
What glorious days will come
From high atop the Peruvian castle
Medieval shapes and forlorn hassle
Bend your knees in sight
Lesson learned
Lesson forgot
Cured ham is all I have
Living so, in a far away land
So salty is the taste of victory
World Cup team, ends in defeat
So lend us your ears
Or listen to them
Prejudice waits for no one

Submitted on 2014-06-24 04:15:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow darlin' I haven't read anything from you in a good bit, your last line just brings it all home hon. I really like this. I think the only thing that throws me off is the cured ham part. Though really it makes me think of that Wiggle song that says ham sammich. Now Im hungry.ADD
gotta love it.
| Posted on 2014-07-14 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked this, very unique in you're imagery, a very enjoyable read..Thank you:)

| Posted on 2014-07-08 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]

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