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    dots Submission Name: Junedots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsJunedots
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    My summer is undone/
    unmade from cropped collages
    Old photo &
    Ice-cream booths
    and café crema, oh how
    smooth –
    the feel of heated plastic
    on a lipstick.

    I pass my face through
    invisible cobwebs
    --no need even
    (for
    inversion)
    here-- for
    they lack intricacy and I lack
    style to scale up
    Eliot’s hydrangeas
    into Russian.

    No home for me back there,
    really my choice, barely
    these petty annoyances
    can make me






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      oh how
    smooth –
    the feel of heated plastic
    on a lipstick.

    I love these lines and much of the imagery here. All of it seems to speak of some sort of longing and loss but I can't quite find my way on this path of breadcrumbs you have left.
    | Posted on 2014-07-08 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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