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    dots Submission Name: Hiddendots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/132
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 934
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 218



    Description:
       I know its short but i've been struggling to write lately. It might be confusing because the hope for what is unclear but thats why i wrote it.


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    dotsHiddendots
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    Still hiding i see,
    Behind a glass wall.
    I can still see you,
    We all can.

    Yet still.
    You hang onto that hope.
    The hope she gave you.
    The hope that will kill you.




    Submitted on 2014-06-29 00:56:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it a little and to the point poem. Sadly "poets" are too laze to read a 8 line poem and comment, oh well you know what it meant, and that's all that matters :) ;)
    | Posted on 2014-07-28 00:00:00 | by LadyVoice | [ Reply to This ]


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