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    dots Submission Name: Good Riddance dots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.41 - 5/110/127
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsGood Riddance dots
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    I used to be just a puppet,
    Doing what i was told.

    Then,
    I became whole.
    It's all thanks to you.

    You made me believe in myself.
    You made me a whole person.

    But now..
    It's hard to believe you're no longer here.
    It's hard to think i can no longer tell you I love you..

    The worst part though,
    You didn't leave.
    You got rid of me.




    Submitted on 2014-06-30 01:12:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked it, i felt where she was coming from. I feel it now a puppet :(
    | Posted on 2014-07-25 00:00:00 | by LadyVoice | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a little too short for my taste. You should elaborate and add some imagery to really reel the reader in. Good bones, but needs something more.

    </3 Lisa
    | Posted on 2014-07-12 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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