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    dots Submission Name: the hands of janedots
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    Author: isabella
    Elite Ratio:    5.56 - 803/905/472
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       and it's funny going back in time to an old me. i find i am not in the same place anymore most days. (which, i am grateful for). still, it's always interesting to revisit.


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    dotsthe hands of janedots
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    she took a jesus stance
    as she lay
    flat upon the ground
    hands
    palm-side-up in protest
    and he stepped on them
    one at a time
    separating sinew from bone
    and wept
    as her longing spread
    red across a comfortable pavement







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      to quote your own silly self

    "i wonder sometimes, why we come back to that place of pain. it was so long ago and we are no longer broken.

    in that way at least."

    I too wonder what was being revisited here. That's more intriguing than the poem itself which is, alas and alack, maybe too much a metaphor for me.
    | Posted on 2014-07-21 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]
      What the heck are you revisiting here? That is a very harrowing little poem.
    | Posted on 2014-07-15 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
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    | Posted on 2014-07-01 00:00:00 | by slingerofink | [ Reply to This ]


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