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    dots Submission Name: There she wasdots
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    Author: SetmyselfonFire
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 41/55/47
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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       Ignoring all the signs is a funny thing.


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    dotsThere she wasdots
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    " Don't tempt me with a good time"
    your infamous line,
    digging holes in my mind
    that you could fill with memories
    made of sarcasm laced with all my fears that I spill out,
    due to spilt wine.
    you made me feel so delicate, taste nothing short of fine.
    There we were, hard earned cash
    for something we couldn't make last
    so our hearts could just...relax.

    There I was
    desperate for something that was already lost,
    already hers.
    Maybe if I was first, fate would change
    sympathize my pain
    not reiterate my pathetic impulse
    that got me on this plane.

    Surrealness made me feel a little insane.
    it was her in the aisle seat
    butterflies eating her alive
    though we have yet to meet
    she felt what I feel inside.
    Hope that it works this time.
    same chances, same guy.
    I admit I was scared
    as if we'd hop off this plane, find him at home waiting to choose
    I took a deep breath,
    finding a couple screws loose.

    There she was, it was her.

    but it wasn't her at all, no not yet
    I'd still get 2 more months,
    but Id never forget.




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      Just a walking down the street singing do-ah-diddydiddy-dum-diddy-doo.
    | Posted on 2014-07-21 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]
      unusual but good deep thinking and reasoning.
    | Posted on 2014-07-03 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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