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    dots Submission Name: With me foreverdots
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    Author: slntfirflm
    ASL Info:    26/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 301/331/93
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       One of the many poems I shall post over this topic. This one is about a month old. To my beautiful sister, Kimberly, who left my world November 21st, 2013.


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    dotsWith me foreverdots
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    I think of you every hour I'm awake.
    I'd give anything for just one more day.
    Some say I've gone insane
    Some days I can barely take the pain.
    I tried everything to keep you alive
    I wanted to see you soar past your limits,
    fly pass the sky.
    Now you're merely in memory
    And I have to learn how to accept,
    that I'll never see that smile again.
    Never see your long blonde hair
    blowing in the wind.
    It'll take me sometime to get the hang of this,
    and I wish it didn't end the way it did.
    Though I know a part of you is still alive,
    even if its only when I close my eyes.




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      this is very touching considering the inspiration. it's important to keep a part of people with us. accepting that they're gone is important too. it's a funny thing. grief. good grief when we find acceptance. denial/anger/depression/and pleading when we don't. you seem still in the depression part. i don't know if you're spiritual but imagining the ones we love in Heaven or some greater place feels nice. sometimes we grieve our loss in losing them in our life, sometimes we grieve their loss as in the fact that they don't have any more of it to live. it's complicated and inevitable to feel though. getting on edge is normal though.
    | Posted on 2014-07-03 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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