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    dots Submission Name: a lil' summerdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 136/243/154
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsa lil' summerdots
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    On these kinds of days
    I'd like to speak french
    feel good about myself
    and be reminded of paris

    On these kinds of days
    Shoes don't hurt my feet
    And I touch random trees
    I'm passing

    On these kind of days
    any more
    poems don't matter
    they are there
    Just Walking
    right next to me




    Submitted on 2014-07-06 21:44:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, how romantic this art piece is. How it speaks to all the fibers of my being. Summer makes me think of Paris as well, me longing to be there (even when I have never been there as of yet, I know I am romanticizing the idea of just being there). I also love to touch trees, and anything that blooms and grows during summer time. It feels amazing, sensational.

    "On these kind of days
    any more
    poems don't matter
    they are there
    Just Walking
    right next to me"

    I love this so much! Although poems do not walk next to me, I do have a lot of songs in my head, just there with me, making summer even more vibrant than it already is! AWESOME POEM!
    | Posted on 2015-01-12 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the simple setup of this with the font choice and spacings, im not sure why but the any more seems out of place (cos it is) and that seems beautiful and critical.
    | Posted on 2014-07-06 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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