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Author:	blankscreen
ASL Info:	22/f/NY
Elite Ratio:	5.57 - 222/196/163
Words:	150

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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Same Mistakes dots

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I laid my head against your chest
And I listened to the
Pitter patter of your footsteps

Tethered to your lips
I found shaded names
And wistful faces

I pretended that you left the door unlocked
So I could inch between your pros
And snuggle in the crevices between your toes

I wanted to make you weep
Because I only remember feelings
In watercolor paintings

I sifted through your eyes
To find the browned bricks of your first house
And the painted steps to your broken stories

I asked you what your fears were
So I could tuck them in between the bars
To this meditated prison

I had forgotten how to smile
Until I looked inside your hands
And swallowed her scent

Your un-comfort-ability soothed me to sleep
Remembering what sleep could mean
I was lulled into forgetfulness
Through your lullabied excuses.

Submitted on 2014-07-09 21:10:22 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I only remember feelings
In watercolor paintings

ugh i literally relate to this 100% love that line. absolutely love it. wish i wrote it.

anyhow.

yeah sometimes excuses are sweet. sometimes we just want to go to sleep. but the waking up. ugh. never much fun.
| Posted on 2014-07-10 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.