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    dots Submission Name: Same Mistakesdots
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    Author: blankscreen
    ASL Info:    22/f/NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.57 - 222/196/163
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSame Mistakesdots
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    I laid my head against your chest
    And I listened to the
    Pitter patter of your footsteps

    Tethered to your lips
    I found shaded names
    And wistful faces

    I pretended that you left the door unlocked
    So I could inch between your pros
    And snuggle in the crevices between your toes

    I wanted to make you weep
    Because I only remember feelings
    In watercolor paintings

    I sifted through your eyes
    To find the browned bricks of your first house
    And the painted steps to your broken stories

    I asked you what your fears were
    So I could tuck them in between the bars
    To this meditated prison

    I had forgotten how to smile
    Until I looked inside your hands
    And swallowed her scent

    Your un-comfort-ability soothed me to sleep
    Remembering what sleep could mean
    I was lulled into forgetfulness
    Through your lullabied excuses.




    Submitted on 2014-07-09 21:10:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I only remember feelings
    In watercolor paintings

    ugh i literally relate to this 100% love that line. absolutely love it. wish i wrote it.

    anyhow.

    yeah sometimes excuses are sweet. sometimes we just want to go to sleep. but the waking up. ugh. never much fun.
    | Posted on 2014-07-10 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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