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    dots Submission Name: Free Falldots
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    Author: CNPerry
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 20/27/21
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsFree Falldots
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    There were those dewy eyes
    Trying to blink away inevitability
    Of course it was no use
    Of course the heart would be broken
    It always is when the eyes are wide open




    Submitted on 2014-07-10 01:37:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The last time I saw my last bo, I remember really seeing him for the first time (dewey eyes and all). And I know my heart broke just then. It truly did. But they became wide open to a life and a place I could no longer see myself in. And God I just hurt for the longest time. But I know I made the right choice of never going back.

    Anyhoo... just some thoughts from reading yours.
    | Posted on 2014-07-14 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm. idk. it depends upon what the eyes are open to. if we're speaking universally. good heartache though. that can be applied. heart break is all down with no love fall. but this has alot of oppositional themes. love and disappointment stalemate. wonderfully expected around here. still a tasty little tid-bit.
    | Posted on 2014-07-10 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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