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    dots Submission Name: the bend of greendots

    Author: isabella
    Elite Ratio:    5.56 - 803/905/472
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsthe bend of greendots

    I sit on softened stone
    and look at grass bent below,
    where my feet were once; firmly planted.

    I sit on the sweat of men and
    softened stone and years gone by;
    too many to recall,
    as I go back to the grass,
    where my feet, bared, bent it back.

    I sit, on the sweat of men
    and indecision;
    my feet sway on either side
    of a softened stone wall
    whose foundation
    separates your house from mine;
    divides, your trees from my trees.

    Yet somehow,
    over time, they have intertwined,
    (the boughs and branches),
    making one canopy to sit under.

    And this is where I stay,
    (upon softened stone and the sweat of men),
    while I contemplate my swinging feet
    that once stood firmly on bent green grass.

    Submitted on 2014-07-14 08:11:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ah ....
    | Posted on 2014-07-14 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is structurally excellent.
    Its like the narrative to 'a river runs through it'
    which goes on my list of movies i should not watch (but do).

    so, you muster up quite a voice.

    considered and intelligent.
    spiritually excellent.

    sorry if this sounds like a food critic review.

    i am having such a day
    so i just wanted you to know you changed my complexion.
    | Posted on 2014-07-14 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      bend it like...
    | Posted on 2014-07-14 00:00:00 | by slingerofink | [ Reply to This ]

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