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    dots Submission Name: not even a black holedots

    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Starting poems with a random word and then seeing where I go from there...generally leads to the same place, the same thoughts, just expressed in a slightly different way. Still, a fun exercise.

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    dotsnot even a black holedots

    Ossified, the memories of the past,
    unyielding and unmerciful,
    forever called to mind
    like songs on the Billboard Top 100;
    they play again and again
    and keep on well past the point of sickness.

    Alleviated, the day of unending sunshine
    has come, to chase away all shadows
    and illuminate all my bones and sinew;
    not even a black hole could swallow
    the light.

    Submitted on 2014-07-17 10:49:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Like a turn on a swing set, we start down, then max out on the pullout g's and soar upwards. Nice ride. I think it worthy of more consideration as to title and tend to want to add an "and" before your "not even..."

    I appreciate your explanation of how you started with a random word. Such tips are muses in themselves.
    | Posted on 2014-07-21 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Strained as it might futurity fatidic's seem the blond in my entropy catalyst to me. To my omnipresent omniscience the thought of such clairaudience clairvoyance, omnificent omnipotence. Now you might say that this is purely nouminal thinking not grounded in corporeally preternatural finite fact but I would say what the evolutional precept is imagination's immaturity for if not to illuminate.

    | Posted on 2014-07-19 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      i generally do that. it's all just language sets to form analogies. this is refreshingly uplifting.
    | Posted on 2014-07-18 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a beautiful write. Particularly the last two lines. Brilliant, that.

    Yes.. I do believe that not even a black hole could swallow the light. Of that I am sure.

    You are refreshing kind sir.

    Thanks for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2014-07-18 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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