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    dots Submission Name: The cycle of "I miss you"dots
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    Author: Raistlin Sith
    ASL Info:    22/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 106/182/66
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsThe cycle of "I miss you"dots
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    Of all the boys you hoard
    I'm the one you want in May.
    By July you've gotten bored
    and it's on to the next prey.

    You do this every year,
    I don't know the new one's name.
    but I know that you'll be back;
    We've always played this game.

    I say the the perfect things,
    inflame each dirty thought,
    ask you to jump through rings
    that make it all for naught.

    But you never can let go
    and reality will ebb.
    those three words that you know
    Trap me right back in your web.




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      I understand this all too well, but it's definitely a change seeing it from a males' point of view. It just goes to show that men aren't the only one playing mind games - females are just as bad, if not worse. If you are going through this situation, I can tell you from experience that it's not worth it. Find someone that you can have a real relationship with. The pain will only get worse and it will only get harder to break away.
    | Posted on 2014-08-07 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      You do an excellent job with rhyme and rhythm and the end leaves me wondering what are those three little words?
    And I wonder what are those perfect things that inflame dirty thought? But, I don't really need to know, the questions are what it is about.
    | Posted on 2014-08-04 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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