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    dots Submission Name: Take Your Timedots

    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 267
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1055
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       Written 1/9/13---for song "take patrol"--new music project-

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    dotsTake Your Timedots

    Take your time.
    Please be careful.
    In your watch,
    Of the hand that ticks, that tocks,
    That takes our time.
    Like flickers of youth,
    Wasted by mindless games,
    By truant thoughts,
    With thoughtless ryhmes.

    Take your time.
    With lovers who may blind,
    With leaves falling upon sidewalks.
    With waves crashing upon the shore.
    With souls mingling.
    Friends and lovers and the laugh of a brother.
    It's all we take from life.
    So, with these things...take your time.
    For of time you can take no more.

    I live every moment like a child.
    Like I'm reborn into this world.
    With my wisdom, my memories, my mind in tact.
    Re-made to a better version of myself with abilities I once lacked.
    Take your time.
    Use it wisely.
    Hear this...
    You can't erase the past and you can't pause the future.
    You can't stitch it in again like a suture.
    Time is fleeting.
    And your face reminds me of my younger days.
    Your skin reminds me of my careless ways.
    Your hands remind me of mine before I knew betrayal.
    So beware girl.
    For you may turn out like me.
    Only time will tell.
    So take it for all it can be.
    A series of blissful encounters or a maelstrom of if's, what coulda beens and maybe's.
    Take your time.
    Use it wisely.

    Submitted on 2014-07-19 15:06:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I still like this... worth sharing it is.

    | Posted on 2015-06-05 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful and quite worth the time... ;)


    | Posted on 2014-07-21 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      some pretty wise writing. nice to see there's a light side to your dark style. gives your writing dimension and makes you seem to have it as well. the structure played to a nice free-verse rhythm and carried the sediment exactly. fine crafting.
    | Posted on 2014-07-21 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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