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    Author: trinityfinger
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 136/344/209
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    This
    is how I receive your warmth: in silence, in reverie;
    these are worlds within words of an empty youth
    burned into one's skin.

    How to touch another in freefall fantasy?
    I tell you this: of light and a circling compassion
    found in meadows, the sky, the rain on a winter's night
    filling the bones with aching enemies.

    I tell you this: that forever is irrational and never infinite
    when humans press claims and promises of dust
    and shadows, in the arcing collapse of buildings
    meant to stand for centuries on their own,
    inscribed with the sweat and blood of ritual
    and tragedy, circling and watching,
    circling and watching
    over you.


    20/07/14




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    While appreciating the content thereof, I have a little trouble gathering together the flow of the final. It does, however, leave powerful imagery of carrion birds and more than a hint of bitterness if one leans it in that direction. Powerful as usual.

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    | Posted on 2014-07-21 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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