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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    26/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 162/239/241
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Misc/The pain inside
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    Ever feel like you're drowning? Like you fell from a cliff into water where the bottom is too dark and deep to see? Gasping for air that isn't there and grasping for ropes that don't exist?
    Ever questioned your sanity? Wonder how it is the people surrounding you can stand to even see you or hear your voice?
    Ever feel like the sadness inside will never ever end, and you just want to cry all the time- But you can't figure out the reason, you can't find yourself.
    Ever feel like your demons are winning? Like it is only a matter of time until one takes over and pulls the trigger?
    Ever feel like you'll never be enough? You'll never be good enough for anyone or for yourself?
    Ever look in the mirror in disgust? Want to break it becaise you can't see anything but fat, disgusting, and ugly?
    Ever wonder what your purpose in life is? Wonder if you're really going anywhere?
    Do you ever wonder who truly cares, who truly loves you- if it's anyone at all?
    Because I do, every second of every day.




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      Pretty sure everyone has had these thoughts a million times in their life. I know i have. Maybe change the format to sentanced instead of a paragraph? It just reminds me of a couple of the recent posts, looks more like a rant than a poem. But good piece. Like i said im pretty sure ive asked myself and felt each feeling and question described here. Life sucks but thats why we strive to succeed and then succeed. To give life a big fuck you!!!

    - kase
    | Posted on 2014-07-25 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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