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    dots Submission Name: My Voice IS MY Weapon!dots
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    Author: LadyVoice
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 2/2/2
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
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       Verbal Abuse is a Weapon


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    dotsMy Voice IS MY Weapon!dots
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    I use my voice without a choice, once I be spittin', i make these niggahs regrettin' they stepping on the mic, when it's not right, ball up fuck it lets fight, verbal abuse as if you know what I'm about to say but you are used to what your abused too and now I know that I am the voice that abused you, my weapon my gun, that keeps shooting out your heart just for fun, fucking letting it drip, drip, drip, AHHH! get a grip, fagot don't trip this bitch killed it, with my voice was the weapon, once again...

    L.V.




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      Thank you so much for your "criticism" everyone has their own way of flow, and in poetry to correct another persons thoughts and flow doesn't make you better but worse. If you've read that it was written freestyle you would have know that and not made it more of a "Racial/Homophobic", thing. The piece was written out of anger and not a political or technical meaning. Sorry if my poetry offended you or anyone else, wait till you read my next one ;) kisses V.L
    | Posted on 2014-07-28 00:00:00 | by LadyVoice | [ Reply to This ]
      My thoughts on this piece are simple. It's immature and offensive. Immature in the sense that is lacks all sense at its center, and offensive in that it uses both racial slurs and homophobic slanders. Both in an unnecessary way.

    Don't get me wrong, I appreciate a good slam and understand that at the core of any good rime is a witty crime (that of robbing your adversary of both his/her mic and his/her senses). But here you are fighting with nobody (besides perhaps yourself, and punctuation—but like you mentioned, you're not a writer so we can disregard that).

    This makes me feel nothing. Please don't take that personally, I'd just rather see you work with yourself than against yo'self.

    Marc.
    | Posted on 2014-07-27 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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