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    dots Submission Name: Broken celibacydots
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    Author: Outlaw
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    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsBroken celibacydots
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    I want to say              deliquescent
           and with envy
    but I cannot.

    This persian-gangster solitude
    is the refuge of many wandering wantons

    & (and)

    the distant emptiness whispers about your eyes;
    the eminent implosion of reason in the ripples
    of that spartan skirt adorning your hips.

           lascivious like a white curtain
    caught in the wind, ever so chaotic
    and pregnant with stability

    you slip from between my fingers when they
    of their own accord, reach out to grasp
    the sense of your touch.




    Submitted on 2014-07-27 00:37:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      So, your trying to put the moves on the Persian gangster's woman (darn jihadists)? Tempting to want to liberate her from the chauvinistic banalities of arab moralism.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-07-29 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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