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    dots Submission Name: Summer's Closing Thoughtdots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 368/381/224
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Lostfriend
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    dotsSummer's Closing Thoughtdots
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    You've worked on your summer body in the winter,
    Now you wonder its worth as dreams fade and wither.
    As autumn nears, your landscape begins to change colour:
    Where is this promise that once offered us forever?




    Submitted on 2014-07-27 20:39:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Short but sweet. I'm sort of confused as to exactly what it's about, I only chose to comment on this piece because I like the imagery. Your last line also hit close to home.
    | Posted on 2014-08-07 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]


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