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Summer's Closing Thought

Author: CrypticBard
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Summer's Closing Thought

You've worked on your summer body in the winter,
Now you wonder its worth as dreams fade and wither.
As autumn nears, your landscape begins to change colour:
Where is this promise that once offered us forever?

Submitted on 2014-07-27 20:39:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Short but sweet. I'm sort of confused as to exactly what it's about, I only chose to comment on this piece because I like the imagery. Your last line also hit close to home.
| Posted on 2014-08-07 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]

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