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    dots Submission Name: I am Moredots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
    Total Views: 720
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       I am MORE


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    dotsI am Moredots
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    I carry myself in such a way that most could never imagine the demons that haunt this mind of mine
    Only a select few know the real truth behind the scars that litter this body
    Even fewer know I still have lingering suicidal thoughts
    I consistently fight the good fight
    Pushing away the feelings of uselessness, objectivity, and emptiness
    Acknowledging I do not face the same struggles as I once did
    Day in and day out throughout my childhood
    However, I do face maybe even a greater war...

    A war upon myself...
    Wrapped up within emotions I have too often shoved away
    Buried deep within pain I can never express to you or anyone else
    I fight the good fight...

    Although, I continue to battle myself keeping everything as level as possible...
    As if walking on eggshells with myself constantly I am!
    I am always one nightmare away from the deep end
    Always one step away from falling off the edge

    Hardly making it, I am
    Yet, I continue to fight this fight...
    For I know I am WORTH more than the sexual abuse that still haunts me
    I am better than these scars that 12 gauge shot gun left me
    I am more than a recovering drug addict...

    I AM MORE




    Submitted on 2014-07-30 23:48:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Intense. That's really all I can say about this. The ending definitely was not what I was expecting. It's a good piece, very emotional. I could feel the strength from your words. If you were a victim of all of those horrible things, I applaud the person you've become, because you definitely ARE MORE. Keep fighting!

    - Kriss
    | Posted on 2014-08-07 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]


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