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    Author: trinityfinger
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    Absence falters, squeezes
    on a warm, autumnal evening.

    You describe potential as a concrete flower
    in this city. I disagree, and search
    for a hybrid mercy

    Lost in words and notes
    and a sense of previous anger
    welling up from years of cold repression,
    a finality to all of this:

    Sunrise is for the tainted yet holy.
    Grace and desire are fickle partners
    where I am worlds apart
    from either kind.

    Speak of brilliance found only in an opal,
    all five senses attuned within a galaxy
    of broken bones, the old-woman smile
    I find in dusty novels that I read
    when all else comes
    unravelled.




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      The towards the opening especially- my words! The cold repression and the welling; the absence that squeezes your heart. Grace and discontent seems equality inadequate now, but won't give up on desire. It's your desire that you find speaking everywhere now, in novels, in music, and (in my case) in your writing.
    | Posted on 2014-08-07 00:00:00 | by Snow9 | [ Reply to This ]


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