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    dots Submission Name: Omnipresent Tormentdots

    Author: metallichick786
    ASL Info:    26/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 78/85/51
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsOmnipresent Tormentdots

    Drowning my own mind to keep it normal.
    Bleeding memories through my veins encircle
    Banished from the gallows
    Blatantly, yet patiently, arise from depths of complacency
    to release me from relief of pain and sorrow.

    The hands forever ingrained inside me... broken.
    Reminiscent of innocence well gone.
    It is here inside the corners, I am forced to move it forward
    with a baggage, ball and chain I label darkness.

    Blood has never satisfied my hunger.
    Trust, an all too foreign concept thrown
    From a withered worthless liar,
    heart like ice and eyes of fire
    I am everything and nothing all at once.

    My grave has dug itself, yet it is shallow.
    Dripping with the silence of regret.
    With a rope around my neck and a sword inside my back
    I am forced within my home inside the ground.

    A tree that covers the earth stretches above me
    Whispering the melodies of time
    It is here my restless soul
    moves on to its own rhythm
    within my song that takes me to the cosmos
    I am home.

    Submitted on 2014-08-07 12:50:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was great. Metallichick eh, whos youre fave metal band and obv metallica doesnt count as metal these days
    | Posted on 2014-08-07 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]

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