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    dots Submission Name: Violet Skydots

    Author: Blue Monk
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1547/457/118
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Journal entry... might lend itself as part of something more epic.

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    dotsViolet Skydots

    beyond the meld a broken veil
    passage for one only
    ken flounders for acceptance
    fears to rise of no return
    of all to burn to burn to burn
    so sweetly fired away it seems
    you crazy lucky bastard

    Submitted on 2014-08-09 11:37:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've come back to this one (and indeed several others that you've posted) again and again and none of my readings help me to any firm understanding of what it's about--although it has something that draws me back time and again.

    the phrasings that give me some difficulty in gleaning the meanings of, are:

    ken flounders for acceptance I am reading 'ken' as knowledge so that makes some sense....until I get to the next line:

    'fears to rise of no return' and from there on I am lost, especially by the surprising last line.

    Overall it has a lovely rollicking rhythm and is so nice to read.

    I see you have it listed as a journal entry to possibly lead to something else so I'd be interested to see what that could be. :)

    | Posted on 2014-09-26 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]

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