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    dots Submission Name: Quiet Screaming For Helpdots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/132
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsQuiet Screaming For Helpdots
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    I lay with my headphones in,
    Volume cranked to the max.
    To silence each of the voices.
    To save me while I'm under attack.

    I sit alone in the dark,
    With only my thoughts in my mind
    They scream the loudest though,
    These loud screams will never shine.






    Submitted on 2014-08-13 22:47:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thoughtful...real...reminded me of my own experience. Perhaps one more stanza would make it complete.
    | Posted on 2014-08-22 00:00:00 | by Meera | [ Reply to This ]
      You really need to try a paper bag, one head at time though, you would not want too punch your way out, by you you know who.
    | Posted on 2014-08-18 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      First part seemed to flow well, and the rest was relative. I thought the last line came a crossed a bit rushed but that is merely a single observation. I can relate with this as I have once before attempted to use music to drone out my own thoughts and fears.
    Thank you for the writing!
    | Posted on 2014-08-16 00:00:00 | by MaeLing | [ Reply to This ]


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