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    dots Submission Name: I wish I coulddots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI wish I coulddots
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    Looking back at the day we met,
    I'd never imagine that you'd be the one
    To change my world around in one day
    To create dreams of times I'd never get to see

    I wish I could go about like I never knew
    What it was like to meet the love of my life
    I wish I could go back in time
    And undo the pages we left behind
    So it'll be like we never happen
    So I can finally be just fine.

    I wish I could go up and leave.
    Leave behind everything we ever made
    And forget that I ever sold my soul
    To a human so perfect, she was fake.

    All those words late at night;
    Did you ever mean them?
    All those whispers in my ears;
    Where they just a lie?
    All the dreams you swore you'd make
    Did you ever see me in them?

    I wish I could forget you
    I wish I could delete these pictures off my phone
    But when I' sitting alone in the dark
    Those photos keep my up
    I remember when I was hurt
    The makeup was running down your face
    You could barely talk,
    But you hugged me so tight
    And whispered those words I'd always miss

    I don't wish I could forget you
    I wish this was all a dream;
    A nightmare.
    And that one day I'd wake up
    And you'd still be lying besides me
    Your kisses being the first thing I taste
    I know I'd hold you so tightly
    And refuse to ever let you go.




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