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    dots Submission Name: Falling Downdots
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    Author: einna
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 11/13/14
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       Undergoing many stresses in an effort to create a better life... Sometimes it just feels like this. I'm not alone on the fall, but we are all falling, unable to aid each other, not making any progress towards the goal (that's how it feels at times).
    8/16/2014


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    I look down upon a valley,
    See my hopes and dreams.
    I reach out to grab them,
    And now I'm falling, endlessly.

    I struggle to find balance,
    Try to land on my feet.
    But, no, I continue falling,
    Passing everything.

    I can't grab on to my surroundings,
    Can't seem to find a rail.
    I see crutches hurtling toward me,
    Only to suddenly pass me by.

    Then I yell out in desperation,
    "Someone, please help!"
    I hear another voice answer,
    "Please, I need some help!"

    I look all around me,
    We are all falling down.
    Thousands of us, falling,
    Just hurtling towards the ground.




    Submitted on 2014-08-16 22:17:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah it life is like that sometimes right? We do what we can. Just hold on to the good. I pray you get through this.
    | Posted on 2014-10-23 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]


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