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Dearest Dad

Author: mdsouza
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My mom was clearing up my desk and found three of my poems which I had written many years ago. Here is one of them - For dad's day.

Dearest Dad

May you day be filled
With honey, chicken cooking in the pot,
Mango milkshake, nice and chilled
And things you like a lot.

May your life be full of happiness,
Joy, contentment, grace,
So that beauty will surround you
Through the ups and downs you face.

May you be His prized disciple
As you strive to do His will.
He'll bless you, make you able
To cope, when the road's uphill.

He'll make you a good father ...
...Nay, a better one.
He'll comfort and counsel you,
Just like He's always done.

So, give praise to God Almighty,
For He has made you glad
And I'll too, praise the Lord
For my fantabulous Dad!

A superb one, I'm proud of;
The best without a doubt
Look when I gaze upon him
And you'll know what I'm talking about.

So, whenever I look you in the eye,
You'll see the pride & love, my pal
I'll go head over heels with joy,
For I'm thrilled to be your gal!

Happy Dad's Day 2 U!

Submitted on 2014-08-18 03:22:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow. This is very beautiful. All of it. The message and the flow. If my dad were still alive, I'd have loved to give him a poem as beautiful as this. I almost cried. Thank you for sharing.

| Posted on 2014-10-23 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]

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