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    dots Submission Name: Just Smiledots
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    Author: mdsouza
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 161/110/25
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       My mom was clearing up my desk and found three of my poems which I had written many years ago. Here is one of them - 'Just Smile.


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    dotsJust Smiledots
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    Sometimes, there is a lot to do
    And pressure weighs one down.
    When you want to quit and cry a bit,
    Just smile - don't ever frown.

    When people did not care for me
    And no one knew my pain,
    I humbly made that sacrifice
    And it was not in vain.

    For, later, I did realize
    That good sacrifice is joy.
    Labour for God, don't expect reward,
    And life, you'll truly enjoy.

    So, when you are tired out,
    And pressure weighs you down,
    Count your blessings and forget your cares,
    Just smile - don't ever frown.

    When people hurt and spoil your name
    And when they deny you praise,
    When you don't attain your hard-earned fame,
    With joy, to God, your voice, raise!

    Don't want the praise that men can give,
    For God can give you more.
    Make a humble sacrifice
    And God's love and grace, implore.

    Remember, life is sometimes tough
    And pressure weighs one down.
    Take courage and live life to the fullest,
    Just smile - don't ever frown.





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      can't say much more than that you fall get up dust off carry on. i like it...please keep in mind these are only my views of how i read this poem.
    | Posted on 2014-08-30 00:00:00 | by mmray | [ Reply to This ]


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