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    dots Submission Name: On This Daydots

    Author: mdsouza
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 161/110/25
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       My mom was clearing up my desk and found three of my poems which I had written many years ago. Here is one of them - On my parents' wedding anniversary. A bit raw but I was very young, then.

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    dotsOn This Daydots

    On this day, God brings you together
    On this day, He takes you by the hand
    To change your lives entirely for the better
    Just as in the beginning of time, He had planned.
    It's for you to care for and nurture each other
    With a love you will grow to understand.

    As you understand and realize
    The worth of the love in which you grow
    You will learn that true happiness lies
    In cherishing each other so.
    You will see through each other's eyes
    Love flow through life forever more.

    Love will flow through every moment,
    Through simple little things.
    Through troubles, trials, tribulations,
    Through prosperity and peace
    And each moment of your married life will bring.
    New things to learn, new thoughts to share
    New joys, new celebrations, through ups and downs
    Keep your pledge to your vocation.

    Life itself is a precious gift
    To be lived by every passing day
    It's for you to lead your daily life
    So as to strengthen and uplift
    Each other in times of pain and strife.
    From now on, all you do and say
    Must mould your lives.
    For on this beautiful day
    You're blessed as 'Husband and Wife'.

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      This is pretty good considering you were still young when you wrote this. Nice translation to your idea. Although the rhyme is a bit inconsistent but the message is there.
    I hope your parents' marriage is prosperous til today.

    | Posted on 2014-10-23 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]

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