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    dots Submission Name: Cry for Helpdots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622/961/454
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    dotsCry for Helpdots
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    I'm maimed by my sorrow,
    I have come to this point...
    This inner silence, my shame,
    Visualizing you to be here...
    When you were never here...

    Nothing I do will change the outcome,
    Devoid my silence, pass my bleeding heart.
    Take pride,
    While I close out, shut down, and die inside...

    When I'm dying without anyone knowing...
    When I'm crying without any reason...

    I'm empty,
    I'm lost

    I need to find help




    Submitted on 2014-08-19 18:15:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i gotta say, my heart hurts when i read your writes. it truly does.

    i want to give words of encouragement but i don't know if they would change how you feel.

    just know i will keep you in my good thoughts and hope that they find their way to you.

    stay tuff over there. stay tuff.
    | Posted on 2014-10-22 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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