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    dots Submission Name: Demonsdots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    You took everything from me
    You destroyed my only one
    The hurt and pain you caused
    I wish that you were gone

    You whisper to her softly
    So much that she can't discern
    Her own voice from you, demon
    Empty promises before the burn

    And it's a vicious cycle
    Replayed time and time again
    She's always where she started
    A fight she cannot win

    And I tried to stop it
    I tried to set her straight
    Cast out demons with light
    But I was just too late

    Every time she steps up
    And faces her demons again
    They always win her over
    And break what they cannot bend

    And she always blames herself
    But it's not all her fault
    The demons wait inside her
    Awaiting her will to hault

    But I dream of a place
    Where her spirit is set free
    And though I may not be there
    My heart will always be

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      wow demons and reasoning hits home ,well written level headed work.
    | Posted on 2014-08-30 00:00:00 | by mmray | [ Reply to This ]

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