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Author: BlazeFlamme
ASL Info:    22/m/TX
Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23 /161 /138
Words: 160
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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You took everything from me
You destroyed my only one
The hurt and pain you caused
I wish that you were gone

You whisper to her softly
So much that she can't discern
Her own voice from you, demon
Empty promises before the burn

And it's a vicious cycle
Replayed time and time again
She's always where she started
A fight she cannot win

And I tried to stop it
I tried to set her straight
Cast out demons with light
But I was just too late

Every time she steps up
And faces her demons again
They always win her over
And break what they cannot bend

And she always blames herself
But it's not all her fault
The demons wait inside her
Awaiting her will to hault

But I dream of a place
Where her spirit is set free
And though I may not be there
My heart will always be

Submitted on 2014-08-19 19:07:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow demons and reasoning hits home ,well written level headed work.
| Posted on 2014-08-30 00:00:00 | by mmray | [ Reply to This ]

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