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    dots Submission Name: King with a touch of Deathdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.29 - 207/277/230
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1255
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    Bytes: 566



    Description:
       just the beginnings of something...not sure what to make of it yet


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    dotsKing with a touch of Deathdots
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    I ruin everything I touch
    like Midas and mildew
    set in paper thin drywall
    between me and you
    I'm aware of the rot
    creeping up that plaster
    cast you keep masking
    your every move

    I count coppers
    thin skinned and hopeless
    in lovers quarreling
    make messes of moving stone
    hearts and dry eyes
    and tearing flow
    rivulets in honey
    mascara runs

    I could never stay angry
    with that beautiful sadness
    you kept neatly buried




    Submitted on 2014-08-19 19:39:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The first line makes me picture someone who feels like he just ruins everything he touches, like King Midas (obviously) and I can relate to that. I've always been so insecure about almost everything and it makes me feel like I can't have a firm grasp of anything. Like I'm bound to slip up and ruin it. That's just me.
    I like your idea in this.
    | Posted on 2014-10-23 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]


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