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    dots Submission Name: Addendum to Runes journal of 6/28/2014dots

    Author: monad
    ASL Info:    64/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1092/410/117
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsAddendum to Runes journal of 6/28/2014dots

    addendum to Runes journal of 6/28/2014

    Said the sea to the shore “you don’t love me anymore
    All the good times seem like long forgotten chores
    While sunshine sucks my waters making rain
    I’ll visit other shores where I have lain
    Make trees and grass and flowers grow again
    Make harmony with clouds the skys I lend
    Yet your sandy walk I will forever tend
    Though you forget it’s time itself I bend”

    Said the shore to the sea “you truly take me wrong
    We will touch throughout eternity in song
    Though moonlight is the mate for which I long
    We’ll touch your tides like members of your tong
    Make swirling currents beautiful and strong
    For time is but the mask where we belong”

    Said the sea to the shore “take comfort in my lust
    For I turn even iron and steel to rust
    Like the oceans of night’s sky I will remain
    To touch your soul with yet a new refrain
    That we may yet be lovers once again”

    I hope you're not gone for two years and more again. I miss you already.

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      Thanks Bruce for the comments on my work---I just throw writes up here and there,~~~~~~testing--see who listens.--who cares and I appreciate any notice from some of our "Old Guard" here at Elite--Time marches on--so they say (Wish I could march!! lol)--anyway jez saying Thanks!!
    | Posted on 2014-10-17 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Bruce me again in response to your response to my comment on your post. :) You made a passing reference to
    the oceans of night's sky in the last verse but I took the poem itself to be about the sea and shore, not about the ocean's of night's sky. Sorry if I misunderstood what you were saying.
    Which are the oceans of night's sky, and which are the shores do you think? :) ~C
    | Posted on 2014-09-19 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Bruce
    I guess I don't need to know what this is referring to to enjoy it. Yes lust seems to be the mot du jour. It's kind of an honest word I think. Interesting concept, the shore and the ocean as lovers--one a little reluctant by the sounds of it. But I wonder how the ocean bends time?
    cheers, Chris
    | Posted on 2014-09-19 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]

    Deja vu! I just went from Ponykeeper who just moved "lust" into where "ice" used to be. I did mention that I would never criticize lust.

    I like these major entities conversing. It seems as though they must have been doing so for a very long time indeed. This has a Carroll sort of ring to it, Walrus and Carpenter sort of thing. And then there's the common element at work.

    "Though moonlight is the mate for which I long" - fav

    sucks my waters
    other shores where I have lain
    it’s time itself I bend

    Quite sexy stuff for geographic features. ;)

    | Posted on 2014-09-18 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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