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    dots Submission Name: Fearlessdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFearlessdots
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    I wonder if
    you snapped him off
    cold
    and waited
    how long until he
    forgets
    to be a friend
    I wonder then
    what that says
    If a year was all it took
    what does that say about me?
    Some crooked love
    that tests a lovers faith
    some liars tongue
    poison

    The truth is I'm the same thing
    you ran away from
    hardly any better
    fixed my head
    but this heart wont hold together.

    But down to your core
    I adore your every grace

    The truth is I'm the same thing
    that you're looking for
    and more
    fixed my head
    but this heart wont hold together.

    I wonder if
    you think of me
    sometimes
    between blinks
    remember
    what we were
    I wonder then
    if the best of times
    see their second in the sun
    while you ponder silences
    where a world of sound
    should be

    The truth is I'm the same thing
    that held you a thousand nights
    and loved you on every one
    a thousand morning suns
    a thousand goofy grins
    a thousand cheek kisses
    a hundred times you awoke
    to my lips on your forehead

    But down to your core
    I adore your every grace

    I wonder if
    when this is done
    there will be room
    for us
    or just a you and I
    I wonder then
    What kind of fate awaits
    and hope
    and pray
    with every fearless fiber
    of my being
    That you could
    or we would




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      it a good poem but I really did not get the message. the title fearless is okay but I didn't see any connection to the poem.
    | Posted on 2014-09-22 00:00:00 | by vinestar | [ Reply to This ]


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