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    Author: Apoetwcloudenvy
    Elite Ratio:    1.44 - 6/9/10
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Story/Romance
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    When your eyes and mines initially connected, it was sometime I could not begin to comprehend. Never have I came to the point in my entire existence where my breathe abruptly stop and literally evaporated from my lungs. That glow from your radiant body captivated me more so a kid glazing at the stars. The faintness bat of your eyes lids shot lust throughout my veins as if I was an addict seeking that ultimate high probing the needle ever so deeply to catch the forbidden tastes.

    See when it comes to you I cannot wrack my brain around it, YOU! A person shrouded in mystery but a person whose essence cloaks my physical eye yet appeals to my spiritual ones. As if you are in many ways resonating with my soul auditing the frequency by every fleeting second.




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      I do hope Medusa agrees, for your sake! “When your eyes and mines initially connected,”
    | Posted on 2014-08-28 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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