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    dots Submission Name: End of Augustdots
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    Author: TheAirWeBreathe
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 5/16/19
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsEnd of Augustdots
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    It is the end of august and the children have long left their home
    abandon and quiet, creepily so.
    For only weeks ago these children were smiling faces.
    But now the mother sits alone.
    She stares in silence at a TV playing shows on loop, just a filler for the sound.
    Until the children return
    ...Never too soon.




    Submitted on 2014-08-28 09:23:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it is the end of august
    and the children
    have long left their homes
    abandoned and quiet, creepily so

    for only weeks ago
    these children were smiling faces
    but now the mother sits alone
    she stares in silence at a TV

    playing shows on a loop
    just a filler for sound
    until the children return
    ...never too soon


    Just a few tweaks to your formatting. The tone makes me wonder if the children have hidden in her house or somewhere in her head. Either way, this is a nice bit of suspense.
    | Posted on 2014-10-01 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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