Honestly, he's a trip

Author: SetmyselfonFire Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 41 /55 /47 Words: 79

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Honestly, he's a trip

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Wandering eyes best friend couldn't keep his mind off them gypsy thighs lines crossed by lies laughter blurrs how she feels inside hes the devil in disguise of an "honest man" always telling tales with his slick lips that he licks as he stares at her hips honestly, he's a trip. but...that gentleman swag heavy heart that's viciously thrown into poetry, that's art,tearing emotions apart to make you hunger, to make you wonder who you are.

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"gypsy thighs"... now there's a nice image. I wonder if it shouldn't be "those" instead of "them". Nice characterization to be so short. It's a poetry thing. Lloyd

| Posted on 2014-09-10 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

So what your saying is his swanky saunter can make you ponder who the hell you are. I've known people like that. Bruce

| Posted on 2014-08-31 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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