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    dots Submission Name: Honestly, he's a tripdots
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    Author: SetmyselfonFire
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 41/55/47
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHonestly, he's a tripdots
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    Wandering eyes
    best friend couldn't keep his mind off
    them gypsy thighs
    lines crossed by lies
    laughter blurrs how she feels inside
    hes the devil in disguise of
    an "honest man"
    always telling tales with his slick lips
    that he licks as he stares at her hips
    honestly, he's a trip.

    but...that gentleman swag
    heavy heart that's viciously thrown into
    poetry, that's art,tearing emotions apart
    to make you hunger, to make you wonder
    who you are.




    Submitted on 2014-08-30 17:33:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "gypsy thighs"... now there's a nice image. I wonder if it shouldn't be "those" instead of "them". Nice characterization to be so short. It's a poetry thing.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2014-09-10 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      So what your saying is his swanky saunter can make you ponder who the hell you are. I've known people like that.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-08-31 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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