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Honestly, he's a trip

Author: SetmyselfonFire
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Words: 79
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Honestly, he's a trip

Wandering eyes
best friend couldn't keep his mind off
them gypsy thighs
lines crossed by lies
laughter blurrs how she feels inside
hes the devil in disguise of
an "honest man"
always telling tales with his slick lips
that he licks as he stares at her hips
honestly, he's a trip.

but...that gentleman swag
heavy heart that's viciously thrown into
poetry, that's art,tearing emotions apart
to make you hunger, to make you wonder
who you are.

Submitted on 2014-08-30 17:33:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "gypsy thighs"... now there's a nice image. I wonder if it shouldn't be "those" instead of "them". Nice characterization to be so short. It's a poetry thing.

| Posted on 2014-09-10 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  So what your saying is his swanky saunter can make you ponder who the hell you are. I've known people like that.

| Posted on 2014-08-31 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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