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    dots Submission Name: Expessed Lovedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsExpessed Lovedots
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    You express your undoubted love for me
    Through your deceit
    Through these half truths you consistently give me
    You have expressed these feelings of unequivocal love for me
    by giving me excuses as to why you cannot measure up
    lame ass reasons as to why you cannot just be honest...

    With me, the person you apparently love oh so dearly.

    My heart, already evolved
    My mind, wanting to back away

    Yet again, another man who cannot seem to fully commit to me
    Weather that be emotionally, mentally, or physically its always something






    Submitted on 2014-09-01 16:23:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can see from this that you have been hurt and many people will try and tell you things you want to hear. Like "plenty more fish in the sea". i think your writing is all you need at the moment, i would embrace what has happened. Pain makes you wiser, and when you want those people to cheer you up they will still be there for you. I look forward to reading more in to your life


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    | Posted on 2014-09-27 00:00:00 | by draconus | [ Reply to This ]


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